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Interesting photo but I find it difficult to look at.
Depth of field is too extreme for me with not even the whole head in sharp focus. Central placement and a distracting background don't work for me either but those are all very personal views and not only may others more artistically literate than I find a lot to like but the effects I describe may be exactly what you wanted.
So please don't take my thoughts too seriously. Don't forget our monthly On Assignment